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Subject: Re: GreySkies (New ARG) Sat Jun 07, 2014 6:18 am
EDIT: The Code in ThePropheteer's Signal video is apparently "FARWEST WKXT 1260MHZ" And a message from an unknown number was sent to the uploader containing a code similar to ThePropheteer's taunts "<+ohc7rN3SASrVgF_kU"
So, I decided to watch all the videos and read the Twitter account (the story is that there were more videos up before they were mysteriously deleted, right?) and I have some constructive criticism.
The story seems very derivative of Marble Hornets (in fact, the introduction is pretty much a paraphrase of theirs) so I suggest branching off. I also suggest more exploration of the story; I don't actually understand why the main character took an interest in these tapes, thought that "events would follow", or who they, Darren, the Propheteer, or anyone else even are. The film is never brought up again, either. The Propheteer hasn't really established any presence as a threat, and their cryptic phrases don't really mean much, be it on an emotional level or a plot-relevant one. Also, the shots could use better focus; a lot of the time I wasn't sure what I should be looking at, and the Slender Man appearance was indistinct.
There are some things that work - for instance, the distortion effects are better than most. I just think they should be applied sparingly, and perhaps have the character wonder why they are happening. Also, the symbol is really cool. You could do a lot with it thematically.
Thank you for the criticism ^^ The only reason why we made the story similar to marble hornets was to fire off the first season but trust me... when season 2 comes around, it will be very different.
ThePropheteer is mainly to annoy and confuse the main character but will become quite threatening over time.
Also the distortion effects will be used less now since I have begun to notice I went overboard on them (Distortion addict, sue me). I do take alot of pride in my distortion effects ^^
About the shots, I had some issue filming some of them because I didnt want to get other people near me on the camera because they'd notice and go apeshit (happened before...). The slender man in this series is currently being worked on so thats why you wont see him alot (Running on a very tight budget).
Thanks again and I shall definitely take this into consideration.
And yes, more videos were deleted and are currently being readded.