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Meri Untainted
Posts : 8 Current Win Points : 2 Join date : 2011-05-10 Location : UK
| Subject: Forever My Sarah Mon May 23, 2011 7:07 pm | |
| *beats off stage fright with a halberd* This is Clair's blog, she's a 16 year old stalker perfectly well adjusted and normal girl who has just met the love of her life, Sarah, a 20-something college student. They have never spoken are crazy about each other and are working toward moving in together. Enjoy. http://forevermysarah.blogspot.com/Criticism appreciated.
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Lero Anxious
Posts : 96 Current Win Points : 12 Join date : 2011-05-02 Age : 34 Location : Home
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Mon May 23, 2011 10:32 pm | |
| Confusing. But that's fine, because I like confusing things, as long as they are supposed to be confusing. I will probably read this. | |
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SliceandDice Anxious
Posts : 77 Current Win Points : 18 Join date : 2011-04-07
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Mon May 23, 2011 11:29 pm | |
| This is great!
But I think you might be moving too fast. I want more about Sarah, and much more about our lovely protagonist! | |
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DFW Observer
Posts : 136 Current Win Points : 67 Join date : 2011-05-03 Age : 33 Location : North Carolina
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Tue May 24, 2011 10:16 am | |
| most adorable stalker ever?
..I think so | |
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TripleDPie Observer
Posts : 170 Current Win Points : 49 Join date : 2011-01-04 Age : 31
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Tue May 24, 2011 12:19 pm | |
| "I THINK SHE HAS A STALKER!"
That was a great line. The blog jumps around a bit and is confusing, but it is funny and i plan on reading more to see where it goes. | |
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PARADOX intent Watched
Posts : 263 Current Win Points : 56 Join date : 2011-01-28 Age : 33 Location : Sacramento, California
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Tue May 24, 2011 12:56 pm | |
| ...does she have Multiple Personality Disorder? That's what it sounds like to me.
I do like this blog though. <3 | |
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Leviathan Untainted
Posts : 5 Current Win Points : 0 Join date : 2011-05-24 Age : 29 Location : Never ever land
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Tue May 24, 2011 1:07 pm | |
| Very cute, yet ever so creepy. I love it. Don't try to rush it though. Take your time and develop your character(s). | |
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Sleepy-S Untainted
Posts : 8 Current Win Points : 0 Join date : 2011-05-21
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Thu May 26, 2011 3:12 pm | |
| It's good, has potential, but you're rushing it. Try to take it slow, develop the characters, make posts a bit longer. Either way, a stalker who is the protagonist is oddly cute XD | |
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BlackWolf Watched
Posts : 279 Current Win Points : 99 Join date : 2010-12-19 Age : 36 Location : Somewhere
| Subject: Re: Forever My Sarah Thu May 26, 2011 6:58 pm | |
| Is Slendy helping the stalker girl Clair? It's got potential. | |
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