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guildcarver Untainted
Posts : 11 Current Win Points : 0 Join date : 2011-10-15 Age : 33 Location : Upton Kentucky
| Subject: So I made a Slender blog Sun May 20, 2012 7:51 pm | |
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| | | xXThe_Jewels_Xx Untainted
Posts : 2 Current Win Points : 0 Join date : 2012-05-20
| Subject: Re: So I made a Slender blog Sun May 20, 2012 8:11 pm | |
| I like your idea. However, try to make it your own. This is my second account on here, so I have been on here for awhile. People do not like to see the same thing over and over. Try changing the characters features, and background information. You should not feel like you have to create your blog in the same story line as other blogs just to be liked. I would love to see more blogs that are somewhat more original. But so far, it looks interesting! Pm me I have a link I can send you that might help you. | |
| | | guildcarver Untainted
Posts : 11 Current Win Points : 0 Join date : 2011-10-15 Age : 33 Location : Upton Kentucky
| Subject: Re: So I made a Slender blog Sun May 20, 2012 8:25 pm | |
| - xXThe_Jewels_Xx wrote:
- I like your idea. However, try to make it your own. This is my second account on here, so I have been on here for awhile. People do not like to see the same thing over and over. Try changing the characters features, and background information. You should not feel like you have to create your blog in the same story line as other blogs just to be liked. I would love to see more blogs that are somewhat more original. But so far, it looks interesting!
Pm me I have a link I can send you that might help you.
Well see I'm kinda starting fresh because I've only read one post from Seeking Truth. I've not read any others but I've been looking though this site on tips and been taking them into account. I'm fiddling with ideas in my head to see what I can do to make it stand out. Sort of handling it like I do my book I'm writing. Suspense is something I'm going to focus on and idk my change some things XD any suggestions would be amazing! | |
| | | BananaBrains Taken
Posts : 448 Current Win Points : 270 Join date : 2011-07-03 Age : 34
| Subject: Re: So I made a Slender blog Sun May 20, 2012 10:14 pm | |
| - page-stretching opinions:
You started it last night and you already have 4 posts? That's moving a little too fast. You need pacing. Unless you're planning to keep churning out posts at the same rate, it's going to seem very inconsistent. Then again, if you do post that much, people will probably get tired of having to catch up on that much at once. It's unmanagable for the reader.
Your first post alone was kind of a huge text wall. Maybe break it down into separate paragraphs for separate interests? Also, if you're going to write a blog, please write. There are a lot of run-on sentences and the intermittent "lol"s make it kind of difficult for me to connect.
By the end of the first entry it seemed pretty obvious that it was going to be a slenderblog. I think something that begins like "me me me me and now I'm going to give my opinions on slender man!" could work in a satire context, but it feels like it's lacking any kind of subtlety here. One of the best parts of a Slenderblog is letting the paranoia build up. Slendy is supposed to screw with your mind and make you think every shadow is out to get you.
Also,the character made the blog with the intended purpose of ranting about things. But now he's just using it as a personal blog? That doesn't make him seem very focused.
The words "suit "tie" and "DEATH" keep appearing in his dream? I'd be more worried about being taken out by the government than Slenderman if I kept seeing those.
The whole blog so far is really too in-your-face about it. Suddenly Slenderman all in one day? It's not believable, which is something that is important to this genre. I think if you're going to write a blog, you should really have read some of the others as a basis for comparison and to know what people expect from these things. I know the feeling of being eager to put out something for people to read, but quality control is a must. You need to make sure that it's something people want to read. Or else just be very secure in the story you want to tell, and not give a damn what anyone else thinks of it. But as it stands, it's got quite a lot of room for improvement.
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| | | guildcarver Untainted
Posts : 11 Current Win Points : 0 Join date : 2011-10-15 Age : 33 Location : Upton Kentucky
| Subject: Re: So I made a Slender blog Tue Jun 05, 2012 11:00 am | |
| - BananaBrains wrote:
- page-stretching opinions:
You started it last night and you already have 4 posts? That's moving a little too fast. You need pacing. Unless you're planning to keep churning out posts at the same rate, it's going to seem very inconsistent. Then again, if you do post that much, people will probably get tired of having to catch up on that much at once. It's unmanagable for the reader.
Your first post alone was kind of a huge text wall. Maybe break it down into separate paragraphs for separate interests? Also, if you're going to write a blog, please write. There are a lot of run-on sentences and the intermittent "lol"s make it kind of difficult for me to connect.
By the end of the first entry it seemed pretty obvious that it was going to be a slenderblog. I think something that begins like "me me me me and now I'm going to give my opinions on slender man!" could work in a satire context, but it feels like it's lacking any kind of subtlety here. One of the best parts of a Slenderblog is letting the paranoia build up. Slendy is supposed to screw with your mind and make you think every shadow is out to get you.
Also,the character made the blog with the intended purpose of ranting about things. But now he's just using it as a personal blog? That doesn't make him seem very focused.
The words "suit "tie" and "DEATH" keep appearing in his dream? I'd be more worried about being taken out by the government than Slenderman if I kept seeing those.
The whole blog so far is really too in-your-face about it. Suddenly Slenderman all in one day? It's not believable, which is something that is important to this genre. I think if you're going to write a blog, you should really have read some of the others as a basis for comparison and to know what people expect from these things. I know the feeling of being eager to put out something for people to read, but quality control is a must. You need to make sure that it's something people want to read. Or else just be very secure in the story you want to tell, and not give a damn what anyone else thinks of it. But as it stands, it's got quite a lot of room for improvement.
Thanks yeah I believe I'm going to somehow work a way in to slow down on the posting. I realize I got a little to Eager McBeaver last night. (Mostly because my ADD had me focusing on this XD) But thanks for the tips I will take them into consideration! I have put up a couple more new post there are now nine all together.
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