SLENDER SERIES: The Dead Are Watching

Entry 1: as said before. Necrominicon (or however the frig you spell it)? Really? Reeeaaallly? Particularly with the use of the ouiji board and the emphasis on the phrase "Paranormal Activity", it felt like a certain, second rate, lame horror movie I know of. *ahem ahem*

(Have you seen the house? Dawn of the Dead, Evil Dead, Army of Darkness, Berserk. I believe the tone of this series is exactly what it was meant to be, classy campy played straight with a lovecraftian flair and a hell lot of nods.)

Entry's 2-5: Ok, so I like the use of ghost footage. I'm very curious about the supernatural and this is an interesting and realistic feeling approach to it. I also appreciate that he replays "ghost" sightings on other videos, like a real person would. I just wish he wouldn't be so "I have never experienced something like this before!!!" Though I loooved some of the subtleties that lend themselves to slender, like the chess peices still standing.



Entry 6: Cheesy overexplination, and what was with the sponge from the sky?



Entry 7: Don't care.
(Build up to a later plot point = Episode 33)



Entry 9: This would've been more effective if you had interviewed him in a place, like your work. I find it hard to believe that a stranger would be willing to come to your house, and talk, on camera, about his errors-in-drinking tattoo. Though, I like that you paid him at the end. That actually redeemed it a lot.



Entry 11: Why does everybody in this series knock like death? Nobody knocks naturally and I can't figure out why. Is that tattoo boy? Creepy non-the-less. The effect is nicely done.

(Same knock as tattoo boy.)



Entry 12: This series has some really nice subtleties. In fact, I would say that's it's strength about all else. The computer screen in the background is a nice touch.



Entry 13: Bleh, paranormal activity.



Entry 15: Dem dissapearin' peoples is back again Marge! Get the shotgon!



Entry 16: There is some creepy and interesting points in these notes, but the audio program, the eye, and the overly loud music dampens the effect. The music is good, but turn it down, and it would have been better without the eye in the background. A simple image of the necromicon or something would have helped me focus on the words themselves.



Entry 17: uuuuuumm...kaayy...



Entry 18: Acting is good, but you lost me when you actually reached out. Felt like acting for a moment, but then it came back.



Entry 19: Eh, creepy idea, but it didn't really get me. I'm not a big fan of the ripple distortion either.



20:

-Preeeeetty.

-Caaaake

-Too TJA Projects for me. Not bad, just not really my style. It was too easy to find. I feel like a character should have to fight for his clues.

Entry 21: You don't need to tell me that this is what we came for. We know. And how did you not notice the Shy Guy standing two feet from you? The camera drop-reveal was good, but it'd work better if he was further away and moving. He looks awkward.



Entry 23: Was there something in the mirror? If there was, that's awesome.

(Argh, yes there be matey.)


Entry 24: That man. has an AWESOME. VOICE.



Entry 25: I made a shocking discovery. *lightening*. Har-de-mcHar. I see what you did there.

(I'm happy somebody else finally noticed )

Doesn't really look like a dead body...looks like a goblin.

(Same actor playing the body o.O)

There's a Thiiiiiing in the Paaaaaaarrrrk! (/bad twiligth zone joke). The tomato juice vomit was a little weak as well.

(Agree)

Entry 26: Of course he's from New Jersey. After all, that is where slender man lives, though I hear he winters in Florida. Although some background information is certainly interesting. Ken you say? Hmm... Better go track down that daughter.

(She is taken)

I just wish it didn't sound like you were reading from a script so much.

(Me too.)

Entry 27: *cough cough cough cough -pick up camera- cough cough cough* Slenderman! oh noes! The coughing should've ended before picking up the camera, or you should've seen slendy and then picked up the camera, because as it is, it seems a little awkward. Also, that slendy head is way too white. Try covering it with a few layers of nylons or something so it looks remotely like flesh. Applause though, the Shy Guys in the front yard actually looked pretty good.

(What else is white in this series and could there be a connection?)


Entry 28: Acting was weak. Leo always talks with the same intonation and it makes him sound like he's reading his lines. Remember, when people are scared, nervious, excited, yadda yadda yadda, there inflection changes.



Entry 31: hey, they got the tape out! inn't that polite?

My only thought when he entered the house? WARIO WAS HERE!

The outburst was nice, it felt real. But it did kinda look like he was pissed because they raided his soda collection.

(You overlooked something important about the mess.)

Entry 32: Acting is good, he looks miserable. The grin at the end was cheesy and reminiscent of the Just Another Fool grin.

It'd been creepy if it was a slow up-grin rather than a sudden grin, you know?



Entry 33: Were those supposed to be tenticles?


Entry 34: Not bad, sound effects are creepy, acting is good, and I'm curious. Just wish I couldn't tell what Windows-moviemaker filter he was using.

(Windows Movie Maker doesn't have this filter... So the mystery is heightened!)